Smell of death

alternativ wrote on 8/11/2011, 9:24 AM
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You

who knows life

and who is living

where the wind strikes hard

and where the cold

is like a whisper

from when

you still could wish

 

why dont you

reach out youre arms

grabs the wind

kisses it

like and old friend

 

there is news

from the old days

the gates you shut

has been opend by one

who wants to know

what you saw

 

one

who knows life

and knows what it whispers

when it laughs

with its balled head

and smell of death

Comments

FIZZI wrote on 8/11/2011, 10:38 AM

i like it and u r drum beats is mild anyway i like u r song

FIZZI wrote on 8/11/2011, 10:38 AM

i like it and u r drum beats is mild anyway i like u r song

FIZZI wrote on 8/11/2011, 10:38 AM

i like it and u r drum beats is mild anyway i like u r song

FIZZI wrote on 8/11/2011, 10:38 AM

i like it and u r drum beats is mild anyway i like u r song

FIZZI wrote on 8/11/2011, 10:38 AM

i like it and u r drum beats is mild anyway i like u r song

FIZZI wrote on 8/11/2011, 10:38 AM

i like it and u r drum beats is mild anyway i like u r song

samp wrote on 8/12/2011, 1:41 AM

I really like your poems!

And the music is great.... interesting and creative!
Voice .... you did very well... rhythm and modulation.

LG samp

Music develops into a very own special sound... FAV

Rana wrote on 8/12/2011, 2:41 AM

Extremely well expression, thanks for putting up the lyrics..

The vocals for me feel like being held back, bring them a bit up with a little treble added which should do the needful.

Solstraale wrote on 8/12/2011, 11:07 AM

My dear man.

Very, very god. The rhythm is fantastic and the words are strong


 

 

Former user wrote on 1/7/2012, 9:51 AM

>Die Stimme ist etwas zu weit hinten___.... kann man nicht verstehen....   ,   das Lesen verwirrt, man weiß nicht, in welcher Zeile man ist....

Sabine