Poetry sabotage

alternativ wrote on 6/5/2011, 2:17 PM
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Its a song of being lonely and longing to be able to love. The poem is in danish so I have tried to translate as good as I possible can...............hope U like it!

 

Its an old poem of mine - I have called it "Vals"

 

There is so much

sand on the floor

I can hardly belive it

it lies on the floor

under the rug

and in the couch

close to where we are

it lies in the coffee

and in the bread

you have just made

 

the clock

on the wall ticks

so I can hardly belive it

moves everything aside

even the words I would have said

the seconds lies on the floor

under the rug

and in the bread

you have just made

 

you lean back

sais its hot today

but theres so strangly quiet

in youre clean livingroom

that it strangles

everything

thats being said

 

 

I know its not techno, but......?

Comments

Former user wrote on 6/6/2011, 9:26 AM

Exceptionally....

 

*****

Former user wrote on 6/6/2011, 10:38 AM

HI,

orginell and well.

Former user wrote on 6/6/2011, 12:44 PM

Was auch immer Du damit meinst -:Hat so einiges drin -:Soweit, so gut!

 

YaraLove

Former user wrote on 12/28/2011, 10:01 AM

>Hatte doch vielleicht etwas mehr erwartet___.... IMMERHIN!

Sabine