Because in your song paraphrase and also in your profile nothing stands, I assume from the language in your song of the fact that you understand no German. Hence, I try it with English.
Your rap has an extremely good sound, but I would have wished more oriental atmosphere from the background music still a little. If the song comes to the end, there still a longer Fill in with oriental sounds and then the stanza simply once again repeats. It is a pity, that the song is so short!
All in all 4*
So it considers to you to rework him, would be great! What language is it generally?