music beats exaggerated the rhythm, the melody part seems to me a little confused, because I think that there are volumes of some tracks that hide the sounds of others.
It is clear this is not intended as a criticism but is just my opinion.
overall the piece is interesting

franco

Maybe you need to listen to Techno/Trance music more often...

...than you would understand...

...you still have a long way to go.

And maybe you should start to produce music for yourself...