i think the voice at the beginning doesnt really fit to the track. for me the track begins at 0:27 or so... I dont think this is a track, you just mixed many different tracks (really short tracks) together.... I think you could have made many good song out of these samples..but you didnt. So i would give you 3* stars cus the different song parts are good (good mix) but this is no track. No track has about 10 different parts, maybe 3  but not 10 or whatever...

Please try to concentrate on 2 or 3 parts of this track that fit together and work on them. you will notice the difference and it will sound better.