When you produce music (or any other kind of art)... first and most important thing is... that you like it yourself. Because if you & don't try to please others and wait for their reactions you are able to continue your way. Have fun in what you're doing, be creative... feel free to express yourself...
I like your track... it has a very good structure...
But you have to watch your peakmeter carefully... (if you use Musicmaker it's in the videomonitor on the right side). Try to keep the master volume under 0 db. Use mastering tools to control the volume of each track to keep max volume down... For now there's too much overmodulation...
4* anyway... (I made the same mistake in the beginning, and got away with 5*)